You know what is my favorite part of?
The handwriting you use, I love the handwriting you put on your text. I'm joking, but it is quite good.
In the first part I liked how it felt like a painting, and the colors and sound gave it a very nice wholesome look... I am not very fond of that kind of drawing though, I liked the second part's style much more, specially the atmosphere, the way you portrayed the city. I will give you some advice though... (that I should follow myself, but I still can't pull it off, if you do, do tell me). When tweening to change angle and zoom, be a bit more careful with the pace, and the smoothness of the tween, so it doesn't feel very mechanical .. I'm still bad at zooms and angles, ha, so there you go.
Again, I like the story you're trying to tell, I think I understood the point. I'll contact you later.. about *shhh....* the secret project... *shhhhh*